"The thought of it being Minerva McGonagall, or some other old hag, made him shiver." [I always thought Severus grudgingly respected her but yeah, she's old]...I love that you show what an obsessive person Sev is. "The invisible girl obviously liked him, in some sort of weird way, and being that passionate at night, had to influence her someway during the lesson" [bang on Severus's greasy head!] "Hermione Granger shed him the most despised look he could ever imagine" [this is the only part of the fic that I feel really goes vs him...perhaps "what was obviously the most unpleasant look she could muster" ... eek I don't mean to write it for you.] Post the next one pleeez pleeez pleeez. I don't want to merely be a corrector, nor do I wish to be a Ravenclaw-ass-kisser. But the fact is...brace yourself...you are talented. There I said it. Now I have to get over myself and laugh. You make me want to read it in an addictive fashion.
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Date: 2009-06-09 01:15 am (UTC)"The invisible girl obviously liked him, in some sort of weird way, and being that passionate at night, had to influence her someway during the lesson" [bang on Severus's greasy head!]
"Hermione Granger shed him the most despised look he could ever imagine" [this is the only part of the fic that I feel really goes vs him...perhaps "what was obviously the most unpleasant look she could muster" ... eek I don't mean to write it for you.] Post the next one pleeez pleeez pleeez.
I don't want to merely be a corrector, nor do I wish to be a Ravenclaw-ass-kisser. But the fact is...brace yourself...you are talented. There I said it. Now I have to get over myself and laugh. You make me want to read it in an addictive fashion.